It’s a lazy transition.
You are not Aaron Sorkin. Not yet.
If the joke lands, great. If it doesn’t, you’ve wasted a page. Make the scene serve plot AND character. It’s a lazy transition
90 pages of setup, 3 pages of resolution. We needed to see the hero’s final choice play out. great. If it doesn’t
The opposite problem of on-the-nose. The character says “Nice weather” for ten minutes and we’re supposed to deduce they are getting a divorce. Eventually, just say it. just say it.
